Comments and Evaluation for N450: Leadership & Management Paper (WAC)

You need to work on writing conventions: grammar, punctuation, & spelling

· Work on clarity – be sure your audience can completely understand and follow your writing

· Use precise and appropriate word choice

· Use a scholarly and professional tone

· Do not:

· use anthropomorphisms

· use contractions

· begin sentences with conjunctions

· Be sure each body paragraph has a clear main point, which directly supports the thesis statement

· You need to provide more source material.

· You rely too heavily on your source material. Source material is supposed to be used to better explain a complicated issue, point, etc., provide an example, or support your ideas, points, analysis, etc.

· 8-10 pages in length not including the title page and references page (you must meet the minimum requirement of 4 pages)

· Minimum of 4 scholarly sources: sources must be recent (within 5 years); older sources must be approved by instructor

· APA

· Your in-text parenthetical citations are not properly formatted

· You MUST use signal phrases before the start of paraphrased source material and a parenthetical citation at the end of it, to indicate where it begins and where it ends

· Your reference entries are not properly formatted

· Your “References” page is not properly formatted

· Write more concisely

· Introduction

· Provide a clear, strong, and accurate thesis statement (no lists)

· Provide enough information to prepare your audience to read your paper

· Introduce the overarching concept of the paper

· Do not discuss the scenario

· Nurse Leadership & BSN Education

· Explain more thoroughly what nursing leadership entails

· Provide more examples of ways in which nurses are leaders

· Explain more thoroughly the importance of effective leadership choices and actions in nursing

· Explain more thoroughly the benefits, for nurse leaders, of a BSN education

· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the benefits of being BSN prepared

· Description of Scenario

· Introduce the scenario

· Clearly connect the scenario to the overall purpose of the paper (without directly mentioning your paper)

· Describe the scenario more concisely

· Describe the scenario more thoroughly

· Describe the scenario more objectively

· Plan & Rationale

· More thoroughly describe what you plan to do and the intended resolution

· More thoroughly describe your rationale

· Explain your rationale for the leadership choices and plan of action. This needs to include some knowledge, concepts, and/or skills you learned in your chosen non-clinical nursing and general education courses.

· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your rationale

· More effectively defend your choice of leadership style(s)

· More thoroughly compare and contrast your chosen style to another possible style

· More thoroughly and effectively argue why your choice would be the most effective for the scenario and why

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your chosen style

· Implementation of Plan

· Describe more thoroughly how you would implement your plan

· Explain more thoroughly the specific steps you would take

· More clearly identify how the steps you are staking reflect your chosen leadership style(s)

· Describe more thoroughly the knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses you plan to use in the execution of your plan

· Explain more thoroughly why and how you will use the described knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses in the execution of your plan

· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for how you will implement your plan

· Awareness & Use of Effective Leadership & Management Choices

· Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices

· Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation (this includes changing styles for different situations)

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation

· Explain the need and benefit for the constant awareness and use of effective leadership and management styles and choices. Use scholarly source material for support.

· Conclusion

· Provide final commentary regarding the benefits of effective leadership and management choices

· Summarize the importance of nurses being aware of and making effective leadership and management choices

· Provide a synopsis of the importance of a BSN education for nurse leaders and the importance of effective leadership choices

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